Tremulous, walking in obscurity,
With shadowy conviction,
Living in a constantly approaching vertex,
Every person a pinnacle of dread,
Every encounter a crime on her being,
Hearing as if deaf, and identity robbed,
An empty shell now adorned in an imaginary,
Opalescent cloak of protection,
In a fantasy of barren survival,
Hiding in the crevices of her mind,
And yet grappling for some sliver of her identity,
The defenses crippled,
Concealed for the sake of conceived unworthiness,
Coveted beneath layers and weeks of schemes,
Lost and forgotten the tender and soothing
Consolation of childish dreams,
Submitting to nakedness,
Yet held at gunpoint by drooling and hungry wolves
For the flesh of a child,
Stripped of all that was once sacred and undefiled,
With such utter rejection and scoff,
Scoundrels from hell feasting upon young supple breasts,
Blindfolded child,
Acquiescence to excecation,
And praying for the end,
Listening to the sound of the shutter on the camera,
As each one takes a turn,
While the other secures the barrel tighty to her temple,
Wondering, running away into the darkness of her mind,
Hoping to live through it,
Trying to make sense of their thrill,
Wondering, why she's not crying,
Yes, trying to make sense of their thrill.
Later in the week,
Urinated on for twenty dollars.
This poem is moving and
This poem is moving and emotional, an precisely written glimpse into what is otherwise not seen. I don't know if your are open for critiques, but the whole poem hit me hard, and the last two lines "later that week" "urinated on for 20 dollars" takes me out of the intesity. its the same message, but the voice is different; it is a little distracting
Do you remember why we're here?
And yes...! Always open for
And yes...! Always open for critque!
...I admire your style of writing just to let you know... I have no formal education except for highschool level in the 70s...of which was not an avid reader at the time.
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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
Yes... you are very
Yes... you are very insightful. That is because the former, true experience...the latter, to emphasize the intensity of a collective. Thank you...deeply appreciated your human insight. ♡♥♡ xo
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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
Welcome to postpoems
You have a flair for adjectives and vocabulary ~~A~~
Hello allets. I used a
Hello allets. I used a different writing strategy than usual for this poem. I will eventually post my others, and you will see the differences. I had a chance to read some of yours last night. It was fun. Thank you for your comment.
...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "