Turbulent Rivers

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turbulent rivers
never ask permission
to wipe the smile off your face
here you go, again

 

beating water with a stick
snaps like a toothpick,
washes away
soon
feeding a beaver's dam

 

you'll hunt the animal
never seeing
your senseless contribution
to flooding everything

trying to be in control

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allets's picture

Enjoyed

"feeding a beaver's dam" while the last verse s jaw-dropping, I read this line 3x before  contnuung ti end. Imagination stopping line, cadence to sudden stop, rexan if beacer allusion - the in walks wisdom like an adage--wow! Cool write.

~A~


 

 

lyrycsyntyme's picture

Thank you, Stella, glad you

Thank you, Stella, glad you so thoroughly enjoyed it. That line's creation was when the pieces around it came together and it felt fluid from there : )

S74RW4RD's picture

As I wrote in an earlier

As I wrote in an earlier comment, your ability to deploy metaphor is exquisitely adroit,


Starward

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Thank you, sir.

Thank you, sir.