smiling, laughing, happiness, peace
this masquerade may never cease
inside i'm lonely, sad and afraid,
it wont go away during this escapade,
known as life.
enjoying the smiles and the life all around,
listening to every great happy sound,
i want to scream with joy just the same,
but i fear if i do i will go quite insane
just like them.
joking and playing's what small kids will do,
i want to join them but i know i am through,
i know you might say that i'm in quite a jam,
but i can't deny what it is that i am,
an adult.
i wish to scream and to play around,
to sneak and hide secrets that i might have found,
to make a friend, build castles of sand,
for once to forget all my worries and
to have fun.
once in a while, i take off my mask,
i forget responsible and dont take to task
every small thing that i wish to be done,
i know what i am, and what i've become:
Again Child.
I enjoy this poem quite a bit. And have to say I still have this feeling/question and I'm supposedly a full adult already :P
As for constructive crit. Watch your caps... They can convey added meaning if you cap only half the time. And I am not thinking that you are trying to convey that extra meaning in this particular poem.
(Just suggestion be aware I don't always remember too but you got talent and it would be a waste to be lost on simple errors.)
All i can say is "Thank You" This poem touched my heart from the very start!
This poem is simply beautiful :)
I think that for some of us, there is always the children in who we are and that from time to time, we will unmask the child within and act like kids do and at the same time, we are adults, but I too, often feel like a kid at heart, and I honestly do feel like a big kid too because there are a lot of times where I would often wish I was still a kid as well, so yeah, and I honestly did enjoy reading this poem. It's so awesome, and you are an awesome writer!! Keep it up, my friend!! =)