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The Point. Death has no mercy and takes what it finds
Its what the devil breathes
Fate plays games with our minds
In which the World does not need.
More pain for the humans to suffer
Tear drops running down our faces
We take life for granted
Not understanding how short it is
Death makes us enchanted
To the people who once lived
Death makes the stomach churn
And children cry.
But makes everybody learn
That life flies by.
When on person passes away
A whole city unites
Knowing that one day
We will all reuinte
With the person who passed away on this day.
Out of order.
Hello,
Just wanted to say.
I love the heart you put into this.
Only note is that a few lines is not co-existing in rhythmic pattern.
Just asking for you to check your lines so you can examine for future reference.
Still good for a teenage poet.
Keep it up, I wish you luck.
R.I.P for all legends of this world.
Regards,
Brian Crowell
Brian Crowell
Young poet, best believe you should know it.
Thank you very much Brian
Thank you very much Brian Crowell
Yes I saw that some of the lines didn't follow my rhyme pattern
But thank you again!!
And yes R.I.P for all the heroes in our lives