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"The Perfect Drug"   11 - 21 - 02



i look into

your dark eyes

i lose myself

in your guise

a torrent of emotion

consuming view

never want to leave

always be with you



i listen to

your magic voice

i sit and listen

i have no choice

magnetic pulls

puppet strings

your vibrations

unnatural being



i feel your touch

and hit a high

for what reason

i don't know why

you have this effect

an upper on me

feel like an addict

forever yours to be



as you swallow

my being whole

i lose myself

and my soul

into your hands

i trust my life

take my worries

relieve my strife

Author's Notes/Comments: 

the warmth of another...

'an upper on me' was originally 'on poor me' --ty to absolukaty for the hint on the fix

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last updated 11 October 2010 - 8:59pm
©24 November 2002 - 1:44am — lillep
6 December 2002 - 8:53am — K Simpson (not verified)
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I really like this poem... it has a great flow and good imagery... my favourite part would definately be:

"magnetic pulls
puppet strings
your vibrations
unnatural being"

One part I think could maybe use a little work is the part that says:

you have this effect
on poor me

"on poor me" seems to be missing a syllable... it doesn't flow quite as well as the rest. Also, it seems like that line is almost unnecessary... we know the effect is on you, so perhaps the space could be used to further the description... what effect? get descriptive!

this poem is great.

cheers,
katy