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Enveloped
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Death "Enveloped" 10 - 19 - 02
listening for sound
searching for light
hitting the surround
but still no sight
my one desire
is to fill a void
rebuild an empire
that lay destroyed
self esteem in ruin
confidence runs in fear
i amm so alone
with no company near
it is pitch black
no bearing or guides
darkness so thick
you can only hide
from the hope
avoid the salvation
grab the rope and
embrace the temptation
to end it all
to open closed eyes
to see the truth
at the moment of demise
you were so close
but only a breath
no longer alone
accompanied by one...
called Death.
Yes we all got the point it is a suprise to see you my old freind i havent seeen your work in forever well ever since i stoped modding baneful, so this was a wonderful pleasure to have one of ur peices for the poem of the day from postpoems. and they are still as wonderful as i remember
James Darr Author of Poetry's New Leash On Life
Owner of the Poets Libary
http://p198.ezboard.com/bthepoetslibrary
I think it's fantastic the way it is. AWESOME job!
I'm no critic by any means, especially apout "death" poems. They're always so dull and drab and depressing. This is well written and it flows well, but if the author didn't feel he couldn't get it to work, then he shouldn't have submitted it. Car companies, clothing manufacturers and carpenters don't put things out that are not quite working and you're as good as they are, so take some pride in what you do. You have a gift. Don't take it for granted. You're special. Grasp it. Know it, but be thankful for it. Keep writing.
Yeah,, come on man,, you can do better than that :)