Paradise fallen (my take on paradise lost)

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Chained beaten bloody as they lead
Rotting, walking corpses stare at me
The heat scorches me as I feel blisters on my burning skin
Darkness blinds my vision and a deep hunger begins
Just the taste of waste enters my mouth
Lead me further down the tunnel going south

A whip hits my flesh as blood splatters
I was a sinner and nothing else matters
The winged beings smile at my despair
Tempting me to run almost like a dare
Their dark putrid scaly skin
Their extreme sadistic abuse towards men.

The smell of their breath like rotting fish
To give me one more chance, my final wish
My feet burned black from the rock underneath
“You will be fine” they chuckle as they lie through their teeth
The end of the tunnel is revealed
Complete darkness further in is Hell concealed.

The beasts unchain me and push me through
They smile evilly and exclaim don’t worry nothing can kill you
I fall into complete darkness as I hear cries of pain
Burning my body all over like boiling rain
Stumble around in the complete black
My attention changes quickly as I hear a loud crack

Far away to my right surrounded by hellfire
I see Beelzebub king of the liars
One unlucky soul facing him in judgment
Beaten and broken till he lay bent
Twitching and crying till he is carried away
He is still alive but a puddle of blood is where he now lay

My stomach feels as if it’s going to digest itself
I see nothing and know nothing except for myself 
I taste nothing but the foulness of this place
I am a sinner and I have fallen from grace
Punishment by cries of remorse
Pain, screaming voices go hoarse

Stab in my side as I hear a snicker
A hideous fallen angel causes my mental health to fall sicker
I am doomed for eternity
I am in more pain then I ever thought I could be
So much torture and it never ceases

Trying to keep my mind together but its broken in pieces.

Complete isolation
Total damnation
Mourning on and on hours end to end
My soul so dead can’t be mended
Cracks of whips and steady marching keep me alert
My stomach so empty my whole body hurts

Forced to constantly march as my feet stay burned and black
I beg you Beelzebub to please let me go back
Flesh torn from my body from the ragged demons
I beg for your mercy lord Jesus
There is no reply because I am all alone
I no longer feel like a person but just a worthless drone

I hear a loud crack as my body jolts upward
I open my eyes and they peer forward
I see the white wall and people around me
I see fresh light and I know this can’t be
I move my arm as I hear the doctors rush
I start crying and speak but I am quickly hushed

I got out the hospital three days later
Many fear death but I fear so much greater
Got my life back on track fixed it all
When I woke up felt like running into a brick wall
I had been pardoned another chance from him
No longer is it in sin that I swim

I am sure that I visited hell when I was out
The pain the suffering all so devout
Granted a pardon by my Lord Jesus Christ
I am now saved trying to get right
Wife didn’t meet the same fate
She died when we crashed at youre gate

Saved woman didn’t share my adventure
Of course I am going to miss her
However I will eventually be north instead of south
No longer a victim of sin’s gaping mouth
As a word of advice for all the foolish
Hell…It is not meant for the squeamish

 

Author's Notes/Comments: 

This is a story I wrote in poem form about hell. It is very image filled.

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Mone's picture

That is extremely hectic but

That is extremely hectic but really good!!!!!

kubolchi's picture

Yes taht is what I went for,

Yes taht is what I went for, but did you enjoy it?

Jesster's picture

Scary

Scary


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