When You Left Me

I’ve waited too long
That’s why I’m writing this song
You’ve meant so much to me
But I was scared
That you wouldn’t want, what we could be
Now it’s too late
And I feel like a fool for letting slip through my grasp

Because I wanted you
You wanted me
But neither of us could see
The pain that would be
When you left me

I’ve tried to be strong
But I just can’t hold on
I said “what else could go wrong”
And now that’s why I’m writing this song

Because I wanted you
You wanted me
But neither of us could see
The pain that would be
When you left me

Author's Notes/Comments: 

I wrote this thinking of a girl...the song/poem basically assesses the situation
I would like to know what people think of it

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Some typing up, a better

Some typing up, a better rhythm for the flow if it is a song,
But as a poem this is quite lovely. I think you could really flog the dictionary for some unusual lines but it is very lovely. Good work :)


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"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

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*Tidying not typing :s

*Tidying not typing :s


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."