Rearranging Things

Put the couch here, No, put it there,

shoot just put the silly thing anywhere,

over by the window or over by the door,

oh, please be careful and don't scratch my floor.

Look at the dust and look at all that dirt,

oh my God, I just stained my very best shirt.

Why do I do this when there is not enough time,

there is always so much dirt and nasty grime.

How does it get all over and up under everything?

Move a couch and there is a big nasty dust ring.

Get out the mop, bucket of water, and the new broom,

Let's get all this dirt that attacks any room.

By the end of the day you are dirty and tired.

Muscles strained and sore, you feel so wired.

The end result makes you feel so happy and good,

makes you want to do another room, if only you could.

There will be other days to do just that,

by then all this to you will be old hat.

So sit back and enjoy the effort you put out,

You will do it again there is no doubt.

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Roz Turner's picture

Hi Renee Well, this is my last critique for tonite!!! My eyes are getting sore.... lol. I liked this one too, conjured up all sorts of ideas for me.. sounds like my house everyday.. just doesnt seem to be enough hours, hey? Thanks for sharing Roz :)

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Rachelle Wiegand's picture

Nee' Dan and I laughed our stoned asses off through this entire poem!! LOL I am not joking. This was too much. Very well-written, girl! You GO! The dust rings cracked me up! You know every person reading this has dust rings! LOL I have said it a thousand times...your means of inspiration astound me!

Jillian Ketterer's picture

Hi Renee! Well...this poem is definitely enjoyable! I definitely see you finding your niche; your poetry is improving. Not that it ever mattered what those jerks said before- but they couldn't say anything about this poem if they wanted to. It contains no so-called "forced rhyme" or anything of the sort. I love it! I have an appointment soon so I don't have the time to read the other new things I see you have here...but I'm sure I will at a later date. Take care!!!! Jill

Ariberdy's picture

I can just picture you doing this task & truly enjoying it, in spite of all the unwanted muscles aches & hidden little dust treasures that you may find. I chuckled all the way through. Fortunately, I don't have to go through that. :) I would have to buy some furniture first. hahahha! Your friend & #1 fan: Amy

Michelle's picture

lol...i like it are too much!!!! Now Im feeling guilty because I just know there is a dust ring where my couch is. ::::looking the other way:::: ugh!!

Tanya c's picture

Renee...this is really good, motivating even, I am hanging up my puter right now and rearranging 'stuff'....gee thanks so much *sarcastic chortle* Seriously I enjoyed it AND I am going to do some rearranging, thankyou for inspiring me to do something other then read and write poetry... Tanya