Intruder

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Fear/Loneliness

Crash. My eyes flare open.

Drip. The faucet leaks.

Creak. The house is whispering.

Gasp. I try not to speak.



Crunch. Footsteps on broken glass.

Swish. The swinging door springs.

Thud. Someone's on the staircase.

Exhale. Conjured thoughts begin to scream.



Laura. My name is whispered.

Click. The doorknob is turned.

Sob. I clench my eyelids shut

Thump. Heartbeat so hard my chest burns.



Chuckle. Hands grasp my neck

Cry. I thrust foreward my kitchen knife

Grunt. A body falls to the ground.

Peek. I slowly open my eyes



Shriek. I see the blood

Scramble. I hurry to the door.

Grasp. Something grabs my ankle

Thud. I fall to the floor



Flip. It's quick and painless

Swish. To the knife I bend

Breathe. I take my last gulp of air

Sigh. I know this is the end.

Author's Notes/Comments: 

I was trying something new, and it didn't come out how I wanted. But I thought I'd put it on here anyways. 2004

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I like it, it's realistic.