What happened to serenity, peace, and tranquility?
It's gone, and in it's wake is rage and no humility.
Cocky, arrogant swaggers stand as a prelude to the downfall
of a person once defined by love and the ability
to make the world brighter
just by smiling a little lighter.
She cannot guess the cause and help herself
for she's falling deep within herself,
and all the world's an audience as she stands upon the stage
feeling pain and feeling rage,
because her life has been a play.
Ophelia doesn't know that the madness lets her go
of the bullshit that she lives, and all she screams is, "No!"
She jumps upon that rock and lets her body drop,
into the water, and it stops.
It slows the pain, and stops her brain from calling his name
for to her it's all the same.
He is gone, she is undone.
Ok I was trying really hard to say something that would be usefull to you, but i'm really new to writting poetry so I'm afraid you'll have to settle for me just saying how much i liked this poem. your word choices were spot on, and the poem had a nice tempo to it. also hamlet is one of my favorite plays so i really dug this.