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Want
I want to fly
I want to cry
I want to finally
Do or die.
I want to live
I want to breathe
I want to give
I want to love
And rise beyond
The fires above.
I want I want
I want I want
To be able
To look you in the eye.
I want to breathe
Right down
Your
Neck
And not to wonder why.
And I want you
To give them heck.
And I want too
To consume stew
At Waterloo
With musket balls
And Frenchmens’ calls!
Bridging
Between us two.
And what I want
And what you want,
They’re not
So incompatible, you see.
We both do want so much
We’re lacking finally.
Yet at this last
I want your body.
I want your soul.
I want your warmth,
To make mine feel whole.
this is
a great poem
I need to say thank you also
peace
Dylan
"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"
Dylan Eliot
Bust Out
I'm sitting in an office now, just read this.. and want to run out and go swimming in a pond and feel alive and kiss a beautiful stranger with tongue. And fall in love. And dance. And sing.
It really is a simple poem.. the words used are simple and basic.. as is the rhythm.
but perhaps that is it's strength because the point of the poem as I see it.. to live life to the fullest and love and experience and share as much as possible... is a simple thing. Felt by everyone. It's a common and beautiful desire.
Thank you for reminding me what life is about.
<3 RS
Yeah. It's not too complex.
Yeah. It's not too complex. It's a nice interpretation you put in here. Really nice actually, you've made me see it in a different light. It's something I was just... feeling at the time. Not over a special person in particular, which may seem strange, but just as a result of my desires.
I'm so, so pleased that this bunch of words helped you to feel that. That is a sacred response for me.
"Satellite's gone
up to the skies.
Thing like that drive me
out of my mind.
I watched it for a little while:
I love to watch things on TV." - Lou Reed
True True
All of your statements ring true in so many ways. Its a beautiful poem.. I struggle with writing all of mine, and they still aren't amazing...I guess I just don't have the gift. :/ but this seemed so natural. Very good job!(:
Thank you for your comment, I
Thank you for your comment, I really appreciate it, and I'm so glad you found it beautiful. First off, do NOT give up - if you feel you have something to say, poetry can be for you.
Writing in itself is probably a bit of a struggle; the very best push against the boundaries of our language trying to use the words we have (which are but an imperfect tool) to crystallise the thoughts, emotions, and baseline chemicals that inform our individual existence in a distilled bunch of words.
I guess this was kind of natural - just state what I want! Of course, I threw in a bit of ambiguity here and there, as "want" fortunately has more than one meaning.
I'm going to read some of yours, see if there's any specific opinions (becuase I make this stuff up as I go along) I can give you.
"Satellite's gone
up to the skies.
Thing like that drive me
out of my mind.
I watched it for a little while:
I love to watch things on TV." - Lou Reed
Ok thanks!(: I'm telling
Ok thanks!(: I'm telling people constantly I always want to learn more, thank you for the help and encouragement!
Me too. I only starting doing
Me too. I only starting doing this a year ago XD, I'm on here for constructive criticism. Will do some in-depth stuff on your work soon!
"Satellite's gone
up to the skies.
Thing like that drive me
out of my mind.
I watched it for a little while:
I love to watch things on TV." - Lou Reed
can't wait
can't wait