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I see your trouble,



day by day.



I see your tears,



I see your pain.



Why can't I wipe it all away?



I see you cry,



when I know you could fly.



Please,



I would go on my knees,



if only I could melt it all away.



When you speak of suicide,



it makes my want to cry,



to run and hide,



from the pain,



I just want to melt it all away.



I see your pain, I see you cry,



just please, please, don't say goodbye.

Author's Notes/Comments: 

I wrote this poem about two of my friends,  right after I watched a video that talked about suicidal teens. Last year ('02) I saved one of my friends' lives by convincing her not to commit suicide. That's why I wrote the last line the way I did, I just didn't want to risk losing my two friends.

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©10 October 2003 - 7:58pm — feyfire13
24 October 2003 - 11:19pm — Sara Floodman (not verified)
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As someone who knows the darkness of being suicidal, and having delt with others in that state, I really enjoyed your poem. How great it would have been to have a friend write something like this during those times! I couldn't have said it better:)

12 October 2003 - 3:44pm — Katie Williams (not verified)
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love ur work keep it up

12 October 2003 - 8:13am — Katrina Smith (not verified)
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When you speak of suicide,

it makes my want to cry,

to run and hide,

from the pain,

I just want to melt it all away.

I see your pain, I see you cry,

just please, please, don't say goodbye

SUICIDE.......SUCH A HARD TOPIC....I KNOW IT OH SO WELL....IN THIS POEM U R THE FRIEND REACHING OUT LETTING HIM/HER KNOW U R THERE TO CATCH THEM AND HELP THEM BACK UP?I LOVED THIS POEM MORE THEN YOU'LL EVER KNOW....THANK U:)