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I Remember
I still remember
the way it felt when I heard you say
I don't love you anymore.
I still remember
the pain I felt that fateful day
When we closed that door...
But there's something inside of me
that doesn't wanna give up hope.
Call me a fool if you want,
but you know...
I remember the way it felt the first time I held you
I remember what we did when we first met
I remember how long it took to say "I love you"
I remember that I'm not ready to give up just yet...
He still remembers
the very first breath we all took.
He still remembers
when we first believed the red words in that holy book.
I can't believe
How people can't begin to see
that He's the one who died for you and me
But I remember the night I gave my life to Him
I remember how it felt to be forgiven of my sin,
and I remember how it is to be with Him once again...
In this life there are things that happen
over which we've no control.
There are times for everyone
when they just don't know where to go...
But I remember...what it feels like to fall to my knees
I remember what it feels like to finally see
I remember how much faith it really takes to believe...
I remember.....
Well done set up
Your "set up", if you will, is very well done, I think. This initially called out as a secular love poem in a way that many try but can't quite pull off. Usually, I see it coming. You caught me off guard here. Which, I'd say, is fine writing. The emotional richness leads to a real sort of neck-snapping when having to adjust from thinking of 'love lost' in a relationship between two people to a love lost between person and creator (only to be refound). You're obviously far from the first to attempt to write such a poem, but I would say you did a very good job at achieving your purpose. :)
Thank you!
Thank you!