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Lifeus Innterruptus
Poetry interrupted my life today.
It reared its sensuous head,
and beckoned me from my labors.
But I managed to resist its hedonistic call.
There where dishes to do,
(Grease and filth encrusted porcelain, topped
with rainbow spheres, slowly turning soft skinned hands
into those of a withered crone's.)
then there was the vacuuming,
(Daemon encased, roaring with hate
and swearing vengeance, bow to my wishes, whisk
this catastrophe from mine eyes...)
the laundry to be done,
(Vile smelling, rancid scum that wastes
my precious hours and sucks out
what little joy I find in this day.)
and then the children start their day,
(Squawking, rabid nestlings from hell or
precious representatives of my immortality,
just depends on the moment you catch me.)
And just as I was about to rest my weary body
from my labors, my husbands announces
to the entire world that he is hungry.
(Love of my life, other half of my soul,
bane of my existence,
earner of the all mighty paycheck,
center of my deepest frustrations, I could
go on but it would be redundant.)
Therefore, I walked back out to the kitchen
to feed him. (Resenting the chaos I create
where order once reigned.)
So my day went, until, finally,
I was able to sit at last,
answering poetry's whispering call.
Only to find myself dwelling on my days
Oh so normal events and not the poetry
I wanted to write at all.
Poetry is a picture or series of pictures that capture life. No make-up, no lights, no director. That is what you have here. I like it a lot, Dragon GreenEyes.
You placed the fantasy of writing against the reality of the workaday. (Yes, I know that stay-home mothers work their lil patooties off...) Good work you got here. I am glad that I read it. :-) More glad that you got it written.
Joe
Super. Every homemakers challenges on paper, even the Cliche "the bane of my existence" belongs to us all. Thank you for sharing this. Linda
This poem has poetential It's a little too digressive, uses too many cliches ("love of my life", "bane of existence"), and, I think, draws a little too much attention to itself with devices such as leaving out articles and addressing inanimate objects directly again and again ("Daemon encased, roaring with hate and swearing vengeance, bow to my wishes, whisk this catastrophe from mine eyes"). I like the premise very much, but I believe that so many parenthetical parts are unnecessary and detract from the coherency of the poem.
You are absolutely right!! Poetry is the solace after a crazy hectic day!! is it safe to assume that you are not to fond of housework ? LOL... Amy Riberdy
Gentle is the night♥
Dragon, Oh, I recognize the frustration of not having enough time to write, then, of course, when you do get down to it, the inspiration may have gone up into the vacuum sweeper. A fun read, and all too true. Maybe that's why it was fun.
This is very cute. Nice one.
This is wonderful! Whimsical and funny! I really love this piece of work! "Housework" - it's not a job, it's an adventure! LOL
Oh how very clever. I just love this. Thank you so much for making me smile. I love the part about the children....I agree....it certainly does depend on the moment one catches you!!! Michelle
What a great find...I love it! It is a good thing you could hear the poetry calling above the "crowded room"... i had the same difficulties a few years ago...thank god things are a little more balanced and i no longer wish to spend my time in "household wars" fighting dirt and grime. Keep writing...great stuff!!! (smiles)
Sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeet. This sounds like a spur of the moment poem... one that wasn't forced and was beautifully captured. :)
this was one that made me laugh out loud... thank you for posting this... I love it when people can write about everyday life in such a way that it makes us laugh.. this make me think of the style of Bern Shaw... he would love this... well crafted and well written.... makes me think of all the things that I should be doing instead of sitting here ...LOL... Renee'
This is like one of my favorite poems posted here right now! I JUST LOVE IT!! I read it outloud to my entire family, they laughed their butts off!! It is very WELL-CRAFTED and soulful. I dig it!! Thanks, Dragoneyes for posting this one!!
Our worlds, Our lives are what we offer up in the way of poetry- Poetry at IT'S BEST, Dragoneyes! This may not be what YOU had in mind, but Divine Inspiration does always find it's way from heart to pen. A beautifully written poem born of truth.