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A Cruel Reality
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Word Play (with Jeremy) a cruel reality - money fame & lust
They claim to be victims in a system of society,
young men raised to have women in variety,
cash makes you dope
and fame gives you power,
this is the good life
we make it rain like a shower
Tantalized by roundness,
with infuriating competition,
distilled by failure,
and fulfilled by culminations
but enthralled by illuminations,
figures of a seductive silhouette
but can't see it's the body of Satan
derailing the minds complexity,
but enthralled by her tongue, Latin
strange woman,
she hangs on em
and preys on em,
with a kiss
she kills Adams' descendants
so they develop vixen disconnect,
and establish cash flow,
becoming constituted to their dinaros
as Esteem becomes routine,
confiscating under table hooks,
while praising adulterous tendencies
and accommodating diablo looks
Until your face becomes a painting in Picaso's book, disfigured
a snare straight through your liver
dysfunctions force reflection, go figure
the cruel reality,
lust made'em suspect
emerging like a rose from the concrete, Shakur,
and now scientology invested, for respect
took more shots than the wild wild west
they told her,
her only assets where her legs and her chest
so at night she couldn't rest unless a man was in the nest,
One day it finally led to an arrest
the cruel reality
the money fame & lust became dust, twin towers
By David Johnson & Jeremy Baker
Wow that was fantastic! iv
Wow that was fantastic! iv played that game before its a fun one ill admit. And you guys did a wonderfull job. Strong words, and meanings, and nicely written. Srry im not very good at comments. lol
-Elfy*
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Some vivid imagery your
Some vivid imagery your ministry in your words are certainly omnipresent, you raise the good as bad which is a blindness society has acquired however we must be careful not to go to the other extreme of blindness. The social commentary is likely to turn some who need to read this perhaps the most turn away, sometimes its better to coat the pill in sugar. I like the overdone / plastic surgery Picasso reference that was gold, this leans heavily on weak women and I don't like that because males are typically less on control of these desires but deemed by 'God' to be more incontrol. This is one of the reasons the new covenant succeeds through Christ and the rules of the old testament do not hold as much credence since the acceptance by Christ which leads by example. One thing I asked myself through your poem, what would Jesus do? He would accept we are all. Fallible yet capable of better. If you realty take on board Jesus died for every sin in the word and perhaps he still suffers even now for the sins of Christians to be saved. She kills Adams descendants, well no. The kill themselves with lack of restraint. I like the Mexican/ Spanish references they add a little colour and flavour. It sort of darkens the mood. Overall some strong words and concepts but quite contentious in regards to gender in equality and marriage is a partnership with assigned roles. There's a deep philosophical and theological argument that runs deep in the poem but that would need to be discussed further unfortunately I don't have the time but I do appreciate the core message and this is rock solid. Hope this is a personal enough critique as requested kind regards SS ps. good work guys!
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