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Coffeehouse April 14 2023
There was a kiss in the rain.
Two umbrellas overlapping
At different heights,
A canopy of color
In the grey and moist daylight.
Ankles wet, I slide into your kiss.
I fit under your arm
In the sideways kiss of good-bye,
Leave taking, see you soon,
One foot going, the other wishing to stay.
Warm and flush from your embrace,
I breathed in the stillness of the moment,
A heart-opening
A heart-filling
A heart-stopping
Moment.
Because,
There, in that moment,
Where two umbrellas overlapped,
The world disappeared,
And there, was
A kiss.
I have been reading poetry
I have been reading poetry for fifty years as of this month. That first stanza is one of the most beautiful descriptioms I have ever encountered in all those years of reading. I congratulate you on this magnificent poem!!!
J-Called
Thank you
Thank you. I have been rewriting this one for decades, but the first stanza has usually stayed the same. I think I used a calliope of color first draft instead of canopy because I wanted to portray a wild colorful ceiling over their heads. But I got called out fir mixing metaphors or something. Plus I would mispronunciate calliope lol
It means a lot that you read and comment.
Debbie
Using calliope in regard to
Using calliope in regard to the colors seems, to me, a perfectly acceptable metaphor, and I am sorry if some narrow minded person criticized your use of it. But, nevertheless, the poem is very beautiful.
J-Called