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you bring out the worst in me
to be honest I'm hurting
around her I'm unworthy
a piece of shit, undeserving
of the crudest morsel of love
love is a ticket you buy, a lottery
holding on tight to it
baited breathe, your whole body rising up- waiting
wanting to believe this could be it
the first 4 numbers- your so close
ridged, bitter, then release
the hope's been beaten and battered out severely
here lies the great deceased
the great hope that once lived in me
to be honest I'm hurting right now
every attempt to open up
and create something beautiful with you
is torn like a scab
taking with it fresh skin anew
I think I hate you
and I don't want to recognize that part in me
I just want a better glimpse
at what real love looks like
I love this, well done! Just
I love this, well done! Just one small criticism with the line "taking with it fresh skin anew" I think the anew is unescessary and would read better with out it. It seems sharper to just stop at fresh skin. Otherwise top marks from me. Many have been there! Cheers SS
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."