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The day is rainy and the cold sets slowly in
Anxiety swelters
Time never looks back, it knows not where it's been
and perhaps it cares not
Hours slash at the sun
With each minute another star in the black blue sky kisses the night
and those that are only slightly stable when the lights are aglow, begin to come undone
and perhaps another day will arrive
Or perhaps things happen at night that will chance our tomorrow
and I doubt that we will be able to correct all the black and blues
and when we are revealed, a day may be eternal, never transforming into morrow
You did a good job on the rhymes. They're subtle but I gaurantee it will sink into some readers minds without them realizing it. I think the subtlety of the rhyme scheme works perfectly with the thought inspiring subject. An excellent job if I do say so myself. ^_^
Honestly the rhymes I didn't notice but the style and thoughts of it I like. Come visit my site there's a lot there that rhymes. I enjoyed reading this one.