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tightrope
I wonder if the phone will ever ring
Maybe I am on my own?
I never realized that people had better things to do
And maybe I can see more clearly, now that I am in the fog
And maybe I don't need to talk
Maybe the voices will do the talking for me
But my spirit is sometimes so quiet that I forget that it is there
and I am determined to keep myself on this tightrope that is so bent on throwing me off
I love this line,
"But my spirit is sometimes so quiet that I forget that it is there
and I am determined to keep myself on this tightrope that is so bent on throwing me off"
And I wonder why I haven't critiqued this yet. It didn't have.. hmm, you know.. the amazingly amazing line that sticks out in your mind like I'm used to, but it was still very good. Very.
Wow!
There is awesome depth to this piece
What a wonderful read it is
everyone gets thrown off once in a while...hopefully its not far from ground
"I never realized that people had better things to do" that made me laugh because I've felt like that SOOO many times! My only thing about this poem is I don't think it should be in the center, take it out and put it into fun line breaks and stuff...that'll make it more powerful. Very nice show of emotions, we've all been there...the last line about the tightrope is f-ing amazing!!!
I like this poem very much. I feel like this wery often. I really like your poems.
I like this poem very much. I feel like this wery often. I really like your poems.