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Darkness (When I Die Inside)

Excruciating

I cannot blink for I bleed

Red globules of tears

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Traditional haiku.  ...Very painful...  perhaps more than that.

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last updated 11 October 2010 - 3:59am
©7 March 2007 - 7:21am — bluewave
7 March 2007 - 6:11pm — Lauren Ellis (not verified)
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Painful, but in an emotional sense as well as a physical one. It also gave really vivid haunting imagery.
Great piece and thanks for your latest comment, i'm glad you enjoyed the poem...the lines you mentioned were also my favourites.
Lauren x

7 March 2007 - 7:31pm — Karyn Indursky (not verified)
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Totally disgusting piece. I didn't like the images you provided me with, but I don't think most people would want to have this particular vision in their head either. You seem to be a foul mood in your writes today. Snap out of it. I like you happy go lucky. :o)