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Head is pounding

Nails are driven inside by hammer

This isn't what I wanted.

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Modern haiku.  I'm currently sick.  Day after X-mas and now I'm grumpy as hell.

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last updated 11 October 2010 - 3:56am
©27 December 2006 - 12:34am — bluewave
1 March 2008 - 12:04am — jonfeb
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Yes, interesting work, but not stricly Haiku! Have you come across the other Japanese popular form: 'Tanka'? again it is syllable-rule based. It might suit your style better. Link for you ~ http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Waka_%28poetry%29#Tanka

27 December 2006 - 5:08am — Ruth Lovejoy (not verified)
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I can relate and I hope you feel better soon..