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Quantum Metaphysics of the Look in Your Eyes
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Seven Bridges I don't love you
for who you are.
I don't love you
for who you aren't.
I don't love you
for what you have,
or what you can give.
I don't not love you
for the things you've done;
and at times,
I love you despite
who you are
and what you do.
I love you
for all the reasons
that you think
that I shouldn't
fear that I can't,
and I believed that I wouldn't.
I love you
not for what you see,
but for what I know
when I look
within you.
Yes! Wonderful, Beavis!
Yes! Wonderful, Beavis! Swooooon.....
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this is really beautiful! You
this is really beautiful! You have a great way of communicating your thought process.
If its possible, no matter what it always starts with a dream!
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Thank you very much!
Well, I never thought I'd see
Well, I never thought I'd see the day when 78 amazing things to read would be in this folder! ;) love your work! Hugss
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
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There would have bailed without your love & HUGSS In the early days!!! ;-) I'm way into the triple digits, if you count the deletes & faded! Another miracle! Love you so much!!!
I love you because of who I
I love you because of who I aspire to become when I look into you heart and feel the depths of your soul,
I love you for the way we pull ourselves up through the eye of each tornado that comes to pass, and how every time I turn around,
It is you who is here beside me,
I love you for all the things you probably think I shouldn't...or wouldn't...or couldn't,
And I love you for all the tomorrows in my life that sprouted from the seeds of each day we shared,
I love you because from you I learned that I have no choice in this life,
But to love....
And if you should ever not be there, for some utter fluke of possibility, I will love you ...still, for whatever remains.
Oh BEAVIS...I THINK I'M FALLING IN LOVE WITH YOU!!!
(but it's probably just the poem.) Must be damn good! Lmao.
...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
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I think it's mutual, dear! I'm enamoured with your luscious poetry as well! ;-)
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okay ebcause I love this so much I have to address the issues I have with its flow!
time for the C.I.A (Crazy Intrusive Ashely) RED MARKER OF DOOOOOMMM!
the entire poemk have a flow, a rhythm of a sense, I don't love you blah, I don't love you blah, till line 7 where suddenly its two reasons after don't, either cut one or put I don't love you between the lines. okay line 8, I don't not love you, gah double negative also takes away from the eastablished patern in my brain and thus tongue when I read, screws your reader over and takes away from emotional impact. I would take not out and keep the same patern the sentance works. Change can't to couldn't again my body and heart are in a rhythm and then it is gone :( and shouldn't couldn't wouldn't were all made for each other ;) I would also remove the not for what you see line
or move it above the I love you part
because we are waiting to hear why you love her after that line and then another not why and its like WHAT THE BLEEEPPP! keep like thoughts with like thoughts, poems are eassays without format and packed with emotional punches ;)
now let me go into the love! "I love you for all the reasons that you that you think that I shouldn't, fear that I can't, and believe that i wouldn't" BEavis if you didn't just capture unconditional love in its purest state...well then I am not a women...
Much Love
Ashley
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Ohhh! I love Rabbit's Red Pen! I'm too tired to edit it properly now, but I added some breaks, maybe for clarity? I'll look again when I have (make!) time! this was a personal poem that I was persuaded to post. Haste makes...ummm something, but I think a microwave is involved...
:) breaks made a world of
:) breaks made a world of difference and like always remeber my edits are mine and the poem is yours, so chnage only what you agree with :)
Much Love
Ashley
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I see what you are saying and agree from a grammatical point, but I think it captures the topsy turvy emotional landscape of why one feels how you feel, and the nefarious and sublime nature of those feelings, and why they endure. I know how you HATE double negatives (and how grammatically incorrect they are), but it just "feels" right in capturing the absurdity & complexity of the emotions and the moment. ;-)
Oh noes
did we just have our first fight poetical soul mate :P
it is your poem therefore it must have your words :) I will just hold it's double negatives against it in self bias fashion :)
Love ya tons
Much Love
Ashley
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My Dear, I could never be at odds with someone I respect & adore as much as I do you! :-) Just too much garlic in the cabbage this time ;-)
:)
my life would truly be less bright without you in it
Much Love
Ashley
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And I couldn't hike these hills without you
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aww we are all sappy and gushy in public forum! The real CIA has just written us off as 'not a threat to America' ;)
Much Love
Ashley
Oops!
I'm afraid I'm already in the data base ;-)
Stunning!
Stunning!
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
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Supermassive HUGSS!!!
beavis
beavis i like the flow, rhythm, raw emotions, and blunt honesty. i like the complexity of what makes someone love someone verses what makes you not love someone. it's hard to explain and sometimes people are at war with their emotions of it...i love you, i love you not. what a tangled mess. well displayed.
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Thanks poetic! ;-)
Yes. Because love just is...
Yes. Because love just is... there is no equal to it. ...no "worth". Once you see that, you are usually "in" love. And great part is...when you find yourself "in" love, without an "attachment" to any relationship, you see what the big "committed relationship" really takes in order for it to work. It isn't just all about "feeling good". It takes working at to have those great feelings.
......Awesome Beavis. I like this one! Thanks for sharing.
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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
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I've found if I'm a bit confused but at peace with a smile for my Lady, that's love. I think if I understood it all, the love would be gone! ;-)
Loved it.
Love it Sir Beavis. I don't know if it's fiction or who's this is written about, either way it's amazing, beautiful, and crafted perfectly.
Poems R Essays Emotion Packed
The emotion must be demonstrated, not simply repeated. I agree with the Wabbit, too much repetition, the motif grows stale from lack of variety and emotions passed on for the reader to feel. I love you, this way and that way but not like that (double negatives? - good catch Wab) I got the I'll take you inspite of your evil ways and will celebrtae your wonderful ways, but the poetics are absent. You write better than this. Don't mind me, I'm not all back into the pp social scene yet. Reality is a bitch and I had to do some bitch slappin' recently. It's editor syndrome, bad news again. Yes, it is your poem, just a bit airy. ~Allets~
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I love you, Lady A! Sometimes, a poem just misses the mark or fails to connect, but we learn as much or more from reasons for the misses as the ones that work. Deeply indebted, my Dear Lady A! :-)