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Disguised Sorrow

Beautiful sea, of rushing, capped waves ~    

timeless sands awaits your love song.      

Within your depths dolphin's play.        

Above your waves ... they fly!              

Tell me, you forgive                        

the few of us                              

not seeing ~                                

your true                                  

pain.                                      
















Author's Notes/Comments: 

I just had to try this one more time! LOL  This form of writing intrigues me.  I love to paint a picture when I write- but to do it with each line fewer syllables than the line before, to me, is a real challenge.  Have you ever really thought of the sea?  We see, usually it's beauty always. Some of us refuse to see that with our neglect of its life and the carelesness of our ships to spill oil and dump rubbish ~ One day ~ What we all enjoy and take for granted, may not be there for us to behold. This form of writing is explained in my comments on Majestic Flight. ~Lesa~

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©15 March 2002 - 8:59am — aspiringangel
18 March 2002 - 10:36am — onelilartist
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Lesa, this is beautiful!!

15 March 2002 - 10:39pm — HAWK SQUAW (not verified)
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well done..... bravo......

I am truly impressed with this........ you have caught on very well...... can't wait to read the next one....... and I am sure that you will.......... you have the gift for this form........ painting the things you see with you heart and allowing the reader to visit that sight with their inner eye.......

thank you for the chance to read this........

Hawksquaw

17 March 2002 - 4:08pm — Tim / manatee Marshall (not verified)
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HI, wonderful,nice images projected in this one
L&P