You let her go

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In my heart there is a vision

Of what used to be a man

In my soul there is a fortress

Taking its last stand

In my tears I hear your laughter

In my mind I see you running

In my dreams I feel you smiling

Looking back I see you’re stunning

In my life there’s shattered dreams

Of a love I tossed aside

In my memories there’s a typo

Whited out by pride

In my past there’s a person

Whose life is full of lies

In my future there’s a lover

Who lets you go and dies

In my story there's one thing

That grabs the reader’s eye

On the page there’s a girlfriend

And when they read her they cry

And I wonder why I loved her

And never tried to try

I wonder how I held her

And never held her dear

I wonder why I dropped her

Yet held onto her fear

Author's Notes/Comments: 

seeing things thro someones eyes

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turonah's picture

Hmm... not bad
I like the flow and the imagery you use, ash
I really like the lines "In my memories there's a typo/Whited out by pride"
For some reason tho, you seem to vary the length of the lines, and it really doesn't work out all that good.
Overall, tho, it's really good!

Reuben

Nicole.J.Burgess's picture

I ike the style in this poem, very good, nice wording in parts good job you are killin me here!!!
Nikki


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twilight_stranger's picture

This is a really cool poem, and i love the style you used to write this...lol, i couldn't help but laugh at the line, "In my memories there’s a typo" just for the typo part ^_^; that was cute....but other than that i really thought the poem was wonderful-- and thank you for writing on my own work. Hope to read more from you soon

Dee