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Betrayal
That which binds contentment true
Hast placed itself beyond thy ruse
Confined its truths within thy lies
And deepened more the frozen nights
Body, soul, mind, and heart
With these I did completely part
Otherwise, my life would be
Known by thee...shamefully
And now with burning wrath inspired
By thy feat...thy sole desire
My palms doth grasp thy lasting breath
Until no more thy soul's repressed
Gazing lowly upon thy shell
My liquid guilt fares thee well
As I lay thee solemnly
Unto thy never-ending sleep...
Haltingly, my heart does fade
Into the pools of subtle grey
which art thine eyes; regretfully,
Forever still, love shall be
hey,
I think this poem is beautiful. You've managed to describe something that usually can't be described in words. I love this.
Sean
It amazes me how you can take something so horrible and morbid and write it so artistically and beautifully.
impressive, most impressive, but you are not shakespeare yet. lol, just kidding, cuz. good use of words. i bet you give the english proffesors at southwest a headache.
I am very impressed. Who would have known that the goofy ninth grader I met years ago could write something as grand as this. I think all of us really under-estimate you sometimes.
Dale... it's beautiful ... I love it and understood it so well. Betrayal does hurt us... Alot .. adn I lvoe you Dale... I would never betray you ..
Love,
Jillian
You have the gift other's think I have. You have a wonderful way with words, and your use of 'old' words is simply magnificent. It is a truly deep poem, and one I assume you have no felt. A creative mind with a creative tongue make for a very interesting combination...
Betrayal, is one of the worst things anyone can expierence. Is it not interesting how love can make us do crazy things?
Wow. Just... wow. I love this poem, I think it's *extremely* well written, and the language is superb.