Ravage

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how does what you've taken make you

more than you have been till now, and

what else do you need to quell the

hunger that you wear within you

when you've eaten every morsel, swallowed

every drop of goodness, will you race on, rage on

feeding like the Toa satiating

evil passion, bringing low from glory

all that could have been

and now

can never be

Author's Notes/Comments: 

Umm ... what did I mean again?

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G.M.H.'s picture

Daniel, thank you for sharing your work. I've read and reread... and even 're'reread ;) a few. They cannot be rushed, they make me think, and feel. You do well what so many cannot... give words and voice to all that you feel and experience. I'm in awe, chinned dropped at the feelings I couldn't help but feel while reading ... I dont know what to say, my critique would not do it justice. I can be a wordy person, so for me to be without words... wow. :) thank you again for sharing yourself(in words) it isn't always that easy to let people in. My advice, don't change a thing, we all write in our own style, and I think it helps evoke the mood of the poem... I'm impressed and looking forward to reading more of your work. yourfellowpoet ;) Geneva