how does what you've taken make you
more than you have been till now, and
what else do you need to quell the
hunger that you wear within you
when you've eaten every morsel, swallowed
every drop of goodness, will you race on, rage on
feeding like the Toa satiating
evil passion, bringing low from glory
all that could have been
and now
can never be
Daniel, thank you for sharing your work. I've read and reread... and even 're'reread ;) a few. They cannot be rushed, they make me think, and feel. You do well what so many cannot... give words and voice to all that you feel and experience. I'm in awe, chinned dropped at the feelings I couldn't help but feel while reading ... I dont know what to say, my critique would not do it justice. I can be a wordy person, so for me to be without words... wow. :) thank you again for sharing yourself(in words) it isn't always that easy to let people in. My advice, don't change a thing, we all write in our own style, and I think it helps evoke the mood of the poem... I'm impressed and looking forward to reading more of your work. yourfellowpoet ;) Geneva