Diamond Chrysanthemum

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First ever attempt besides being forced to in school. Excuse the grammar mistakes. Well here goes......

Her spirits illuminating radience rivals that of a golden chrysanthemum,
it's glittering flower blooming in the rays of the gilded sun.

The flower is held up by a diamond stem, resiliant and impeccable.
She refuses to wilt, neither will her caretaker allow her to be trampled upon.
The stem has many facets that reflect brilliantly in the luminance of her Gardeners love.

This single flower sowed by the ethereal hand of the Lord has by luck, bloomed for one as lowly as me
I shall reap this flower and forever nourish it with the waters of ardency.

Im up for comments. please make them constructive

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Beautiful imagery! It is hard

Beautiful imagery! It is hard to tell this is your first poem that was not forced upon you by school! Keep writing! Whomever the poem is about is a very lucky female.