"...it was familiar/and it: "...it was familiar/and it rhymed/well enough" - the story of my life! The line snagged me. I got netted and pulled in. I am always glad to discover a gem in the wordmine that tumbles into the palm, is thrown into the air, grasped, and pocketed. You never know what line will target and bullseye a reader. :D
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I have a new favorite! The: I have a new favorite! The way you connected our present lives to monumental, spiritual events, making the heavenly bodies a "cosmic witness . . . like a spiritual rhyme" was a breathtaking sweep of inspiration and beauty. Magnificent!
An expansive view of ultimate: An expansive view of ultimate reality beyond this dense realm and even what we call heaven. I like your implication that the destination is not necessarily a place but a focus, a state, that we are. Uplifting and liberating.
I'm imagining a superb: I'm imagining a superb finished creation, but even if you ended it here, there is a sense of blissful completion in this compact adventure from first sight to deep connection. Wonderful.
tula commented on: shoji by tula4 years 47 weeks ago
Thanks, allets. Let me: Thanks, allets. Let me ruminate for some time.. because I often forget about some.of these grammar rules, especially if I talk in street sociolects often, or even if I do not use it as often as it should be correctly used.. due to possible intercultural incompetence on my part.
Shot, Bombed, Killed, Abandoned: Dogs in the military are killed, shot, bombed,abandoned... and after abandonment can be killedby the local populace.https://theweek.com/articles/479708/disturbing-effects-war-military-dogs
I am partial to Autumn poems;: I am partial to Autumn poems; that is, I mean to say, to good Autumn poems. And this one is an EXCELLENT autumn poem. Highly evocative of both the beauty and the thrill of Autumn, not one of its words is out of place, or wasted, or superfluous.