One of my fondest memories of: One of my fondest memories of my undergrad days was a lecture held at the home of a young assistant professor of History and Asian studies. At my college, professors of most of the courses were expected to host one evening per course at their homes (if they lived close to campus) with food and beverages provided at departmental expense. This assistant professor was the most dynamic speak I, and most of my classmates, had ever heard. (He looked, in those days, like a wild hippy, and the Provost of the college was openly opposed to granting him tenure. The tenure hearing was attended by so many students---the majority of whom were not History majors---that its location had to be moved to an auditorium, and each time the Provost attempted to speak, he was shouted down by the assembled students. After such a demonstration, the college's Board of Directors granted tenure, despite the Provost's opinions.)
At his home, we were supposed to hear a lecture on ancient Japanese history. However, while being transported to his home, we decided to try to divery the lecture into hearing about the bombing of Hiroshima, which he has extensively researched during his long visits to Japan. He fell for this ruse, and for over two hours, while the late May sun was sinking in the west, he told us of the events that culminated in the detonation of the bomb over Hiroshima and its effects. You could have heard a pin drop in the room, as he held us, spellbound (like the wedding guest in Coleridge's Ancient Mariner poem), and, with his words, transported us back to that awful day. First we were in the Enola Gay with the bombing crew; then we were at ground zero with the victims. By the time the evening was fully dark, he had given us the most comprehensive summary of the Hiroshima event that most of us were likely to ever encounter. We talked of it among ourselves for the remainder of the term. I received, in both courses that I took with him, a C minus, which wrecked the 3.0+ average I had maintained, so that I graduated with a 2.9999999, or something of that nature. And when he asked me, two decades later, why I had taken courses in a subject on which I had little if any interest, I disclosed to him the kind of reputation hs a speaker that he had, and, according to the students of his that I met in 2000 and 2001, he continued to demonstrate.
Ironically, my father, who had been a Marine aboard the battleship Nevada, which had been tasked with being the spearhead of an invasionary force against the Japanese main island, learned that he would have been the third Marine to step on to Japanese soil, and was expected to be part of a defensive slaughter, such that his death certificate, and the letter of condolence to his parents, had already been prepared by the commander of the Nevada. However, three days before the bomb was dropped, the Nevada turned about 180 degrees and began moving, at full speed, away from Japan. The physicists who had built the bomb had badly overestimated the blast and radioactivity radius, and it was feared that the Nevada might have been adversely affected if it were nearing Japan. So, while my History professor's lecture made me realize how terrible the bombing was, my father (not my birth father; I mean the father who adopted and raised me, and gave me this great historical surname of which I am most unworthy) was saved by President Truman's decision to proceed with the bombing rather than the invasion.
I like using forms like: I like using forms like etheree, limerick, fibbonacci in writing. It helps me work on discipline which benefits the free verse as well. Yes, we must recognize the difference between religion and spirituality and also the difference between righteousness and self-righteousness. thank you for reading and commenting.
Wow. What a poignant and: Wow. What a poignant and gut-wrenching elegy. The effect of sadness leaps off the screen from your words and really grabs the reader. That final stanza just seems to echo into the distance as the poem closes, and leaves the reader with a sense of sorrow of missed opportunity, and the needless death of a young life in a war in which we should never have gotten entangled. On the negative side, the emotional effect is somewhat blunted by the weakening of several verbs. The poem mostly speaks in the third person, but there is a confusing change to second person in the last line of the pentultimate stanza. These aspects prevent the poem from being as great as its subject, and your poignantly emotional remembrance, are. But a bit of editing could free the poem from those pitfalls.
Nevertheless, this poem is emotionally unsettling, which is exactly what it should be. I, personally, did not know, nor was ever acquainted with, anyone who died in that war. But a cousin of mine, who studied in college to be a pharmecologist, was drafted for the infantry, and when he returned he was never the same, and has, for most of my life, avoided any family contacts. I was thinking of him when I read this poem, as well; and that is one of the strengths of the poem---it compels the reader to pause, and to wonder if there was anyone in his or her life similar to the person you have described in the poem. In the subject matter of the poem, and the emotional power it harnasses, you have written a remarkable achievement, and one which I will revisit to read again---and which, I am sure, will continue to haunt me.
My great great grandfather: My great great grandfather was one of those charlatan preachers, and the damage he did to our family is still resonating. He was so mean that no local church wanted him as their pastor. The single photograph I have of him, a very primitive photograph from the early 20th century, depicts an old man glaring at the camera as if to call a curse down on the viewer.
I became so tired of the spoonfeeding of religion by charlatan preachers, that I abandoned the religious practices of my spouse and her family to become a convert to the Orthodox Church. No one there asks me, "Have you found Jay-zus," and, "How much d'you bawl?" And I do not mention this to evangelize; only to say what my experience has been.
The poem conveys a lot of profound wisdom and experience, and I applaud the verse form by which you present it.
This is a very brave gesture,: This is a very brave gesture, and most admirable. I have nothing to forgive you for---you have not offended me at all. I think you have set an example that certain members of this site, claiming to be poets, ought to follow carefully.
Renewable energy is not: Renewable energy is not always green. That's true. You made some very plausible predictions here. This is certainly a direct (and brilliant) hit:
". . . We rock
and roll with laws in usa. Give
me your tired and your fertile.
Damn, we write good poetry."
Lady, you got style!