Thank you dearly Patty: I be talking non-stop like a busted fuckin' jukebox feels like Poetry is lost, but inkblots breech blue twilight then lavender lighting strikes and opens her petals.
Even at my age, I can still: Even at my age, I can still remember a couple of my teen dreams (and I don't just mean the people I had crushes on, lol). And the most famous teen dream in literature happened in Geneva, Switzerland, when a nineteen year old English girl, homeschooled and very shy, awoke suddenly from a hideous nightmare, her heart pounding. By concidence, the friends with whom she was vacationing, had. several days earlier, proposed an informal contest of writing a ghost story (the month of June had turned out to be very damp and rainy, so they had amused themselves by reading aloud from a book of German horror stories; and when they got to the end of the book, the game was proposed by their host). The English girl began trying to describe her nightmare on paper, thinking it would amount to a short story at best. Over approximately a year and a half, it became a novel. Her name was Mary Shelley, and her novel---the first of about five or so---was entitled, Frankenstein, and has never been out of print. The anniversary of the nightmare was just last week, June 16th.
A spellbinding, antique: A spellbinding, antique odyssey. I was completely blissed out by this enthrallingly beautiful excursion that has a powerful sense of time and place. The evocative images, the ecstasy of the couple throwing themselves "between/ the shadows, and the flames", suggest a Celtic (or other ancient European pagan group) Midsummer festival believed to boost the sun's energy and increase the power of magic.
You worked some magic yourself with the cadence in this beguiling work of art. The lines have a flow and a pulse like "the beat of rising drums" that carry the lovers "to the break of dawn".
Too good to read only once. Truthfully, I was swept away by this gorgeous indulgence.
I'm so overwhelmed by your: I'm so overwhelmed by your deep comprehension of my vision and your priceless support. You make a difference through your own work and through your scholarly appreciation of others'. Celestial bodies of blessings revolve around your central star as well.
You may feel like you're: You may feel like you're gone, but your standout skill is all here. Impeccable structure, edgy language, emotive power. Seems to me the lights are on and you're definitely home.
I am very glad to see a: I am very glad to see a sample of Afzal Shauq's style---from two aspects, his verbalization and the structure of his comment's content: most enlightening indeed. Thanks for preserving it on this poem.
And if I may reply to your: And if I may reply to your gracious reply, you have just given me the summary of what my several comments on your poem have attempted to say about your Poetry (future graduate students take note: this is what my comments have tried to express about the contents of her poems, which contain generous words, profound perspective, insights into the heart of the matter, and unshakable comfort provided). While I look forward to many more poems of yours on which to comment, you have given me the summary of what I find so consistently in all of your poems---like the orbit of four planets around the radiant star of your verbal talent.
Thank you for the reply. I: Thank you for the reply. I have re-read the poem, and would like to expand upon my earlier comment. Are you familiar with the so-called "strange stories" written by Robert Aickman? He is considered by many to be the finest writer of ghost and horror fiction in England during in the latter half of the 20th century. Your poem reminded me very much of his tale, "Ringing The Changes," and I mean that in the most complimentary way.
Atmospheric and engaging. I: Atmospheric and engaging. I was intrigued by the transition from mental turbulence to a serene and idyllic nocturnal landscape after the words "Inward, past all that". The suggestion is one of inner strength and the triumph of focus. Enjoyed this entrancing and beautiful journey.
Thank you for your generous: Thank you for your generous words and profound perspective. Your insights plunged right to the heart of the matter and provided unshakable comfort. Needed that!