Now you look to me like a pure
rushing fountain
Adorned only by your own
sweet splashes
In your gentle mood
You claim you do not hate me
You, whom I have suspected of
collusion in the crimes
against my childhood;
thefts by the owners of the
sunshine (guarded always
against the storm by
the warmest sweaters)
I, so bewildered by the storm,
standing on the ground becoming
mud, making a friend of the
cold wind and kisses of the wet
Unable, as they say, to come in
out of the rain.
When you smiled your smile of
festivals and good news
I felt bereft
And when you frowned
I felt that we were equalized
But when I saw your hurt
I wanted to turn down the
Volume of your pain
And after all this
who are you?
and are you still my enemy?
I am told by reliable sources
that you are kind
Neither of us have the woman we both clung to
But she will never know the
strength that saw you through
Though I cannot be sorry
that my winter spread to you
that my heart's needs made you bleed
And I am glad you are putting out new buds
Now you look to me like a pure
rushing fountain
Adorned only by your own
sweet splashes.
Saw Saiom's Reference
And read 2x.They die and we examine the love and the pain. The attraction and aversions amassed in grief's relieved pool. Exhausting poem. Hope all is well.
.
.
Lady A
Remarkably outstanding poem.........
amazing the hindsight you acquired upon that woman's death some would never reach that and be able to say such a thing in simple words about that woman let alone write such a glorious poetic tribute to that very self discovery of the fact. In a manner of speaking that could read as a belated eulogy to her...........sincerely, Melissa Lundeen.
postpoems belated thanks
Hi Melissa, I had my settings wrong so it seems postpoems didn't notify me when people commented. I am so sorry. Thank you for your kind comments! Sincerely, Jan
A poet I showed this to said 'breathtaking'
Excellent imagery, a total picture of the love you have for this person, she would be proud!
postpoems belated thanks
Hi, I had my settings wrong so I think I was not notified of comments on my poems. Is it possible that your comment is from 2006? I guess it must be so. This is probably the most belated apology you may ever receive. (your baby must be a big girl, or boy? by now).
Thank you so much for our kind review.
Beautiful and serves as an artifice of forgiveness.
That is absolutely fantastic! Really flows well. I love it, well done. Laura x
your comment from 2008
For some reason your comment was not sent to me. I just saw it today. Thank you for your encouraging response. Jan
I really like this piece. At first I found the style of it unique, and then the second read through the words really hit me. Thank you for sharing this one, I now think I have a glimpse from the other side of things. Isn't life odd in the way sometimes, we just suddenly understand things.
postpoems belated thanks
Lisabeth, thank you so much for your lovely comment and for your understanding of the poem! This thank you is very belated. I'm really sorry.
May every one's story reach this conclusion, and may every revolving door cease--
I read this thinking it was two sisters competing for the affections of a mother, so when I read your comment, I saw you were in a different context. I believe it is good when a poem can be read from more than one perspective.
postpoems belated thanks
Hi Dolores, I recognize your name. I am not sure if I ever responded to this comment, or if I remember your name from another poem, that hopefully I did respond to. It seems my settings were wrong and I was not being notified as I expected to be, by postpoems, when someone commented. But I am confused, because I think I remember your comment about thinking it was sisters. I can see why you might have thought that, if you had sibling rivalry. Well, let me thank you for your comment, belatedly.
This poet's art is as powerful as her words.. her portrait of Looking Horse has been one of several she offered to a showing of her work
One of the most beautiful lines ever chiseled from pain is your Now you look to me like a pure rushing fountain Adorned only by your own sweet splashes