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Suffer in silence
it hurts to say your name out loud
i always choke on the ending vowel
i know what made this happen is my fault
and I know for a fact I was entirely wrong
i thought you wouldn't miss me
and I thought you didn't care
and yet every corner I turn you always prove me wrong
i wish you knew the extent of what I feel
sometimes I don't feel like any of this is real
i don't want to talk
i don't want to smile
but I do for you every once in a while
because I don't want you to remember me as always sad
rather I want you to see me and always be glad
i want you to smile, laugh and live your life
but I'm so scared of being left behind
because I love you
i don't ever want you to doubt that
i know I've messed up
and I'm sorry about that
but I can't change what happened
and I can't change the past
but I'm trying to show you I can change my act
and maybe you'll see that I'm not all that bad
but it gets to me a lot more than it should
my feeling over-ride my thoughts
and I can't put them to bed
i don't want to cry anymore
please let this hell end
im suffering in silence but I won't tell you that
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Hurt is never ecstasy
Pain is never pleasing
Although it leaves you anguished
There’s beauty in your suffering
Like a rose, when crushed
Delivers its sweet smell to its destroyer
Like a flame, when doused with water
Turns into a cloud and flies away
Like a mountain, who’s being mined
Its rock turns to dust and dances in the wind
Like the night, being conquered
Brings forth a beautiful day
Silent sufferer take heart
I know it's agony you feel
But while you soldier on in retrospect
There’s still beauty in your suffering
Still Your Friend,
~Seraphim
Post Tenebras Spero Lucem
Don't be afraid to turn those
Don't be afraid to turn those end-rhymes into internal rhymes. It's a well-written poem, but let your rythem not be dictated by the ryming. Pick your line breaks where they allow each line to be stong in themselves, or at least form couplets. I enjoyed reading this when I picked my own spacing. Consider what sounds best, rhythem-wise
Rhythm Wise
Poetry writing leads eventual to a feel for rhythm and rhyme. I did not catch rhymes at first reading. A lot of one syllable words. Introspection eventually turns outward; a poet's evolutionary process. Nice confession poem the day after Valentine's Day. Irony at the end - nice :D