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i hate everything

showing every breath you breathe
and you wear your heart out on your sleeve
and when you begged me not to leave
and now i hope you don't come back again
and you said you were my friend
and you know i don't want to depend
don't even begin to pretend that you want to make amends
your emotions, your inspiriation transcends
that every thing is better than it could have been
on you because you're not reliable
the truth is undeniable
all of the things you did to rival
my comebacks and my triumphs
you only live and die once
and i'm tired of all of the violence

Author's Notes/Comments: 

this is one of the rare occasions where i use rhymes i guess.

i don't know if it's kind of awkward because of the rhyme scheme used (A A A B B B B B B C C C D D D) but whatever. i was going to do it (A B B B A C C C A D D D A) but i didn't like the flow of it as much.

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I like this one too!

I like this one too! Violence sucks.


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i appreciate that you read my

i appreciate that you read my posts too

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this is more about love. but

this is more about love. but i see how it could be interpreted that way. i like that you think about stuff and digest tit though it's an excellent quality

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I love it! It reminds me of a

I love it! It reminds me of a past poet on here who was great but not very nice... ;) hugss


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and who is it? :p

and who is it? :p

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It started with a P...!

It started with a P...!


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

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cheeky

cheeky

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But, but, but! ;p

But, but, but! ;p


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

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george bush doesn't care

george bush doesn't care about black people

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eccentricities are what make

eccentricities are what make us interesting. at least i hope so :p

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Or alienated! ;D double edged

Or alienated! ;D double edged sword lol! ;)


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

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man i was actually like

man i was actually like thinking the same thing as i wrote that but i was trying to not be a negative nancy so to speak :p

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Truth is sometimes negative

Truth is sometimes negative but a balanced view is a much better view than a fools paradise caught unawares by the cruel realities of the harsh yet beautiful world... ;P some call it negative Nancying, others realism... Lol!


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."