His Eyes

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Romantic Pieces

Like a placid lake flowing over pure gold

A pure perfection that no one but God could mold

With sincerity and truth it lies behind

That no gaze could break without a hate of a kind

A great big snow wrapped gently around the soul

A dark, round blackness with depth of an endless hole

Perfectly balanced between is a great fire

Of a crimson and brown; the whole of my desire

It shades and moves in the rythm of my heart

It flashes and beams with ev'ry thought on my part

It is a portal to every emotion

When our gazes meet everything stops motion

It's an endless peace that no one can break now

A peace full of excitement and love endowed

I know through the tears we cry, it will be sign

Of forever love; his gaze will always be mine

Author's Notes/Comments: 

I switch from romantic poem to heart break poem constantly... I decided to try to dedicate this poem to imagery and description rather then emotion. The rhyme scheme is a constant AABB pattern and the meter is a constant every other line pattern. I hope you enjoyed!

 

Let me know what you think! Leave a comment; critique it, encourage it, suggest something! I love hearing your opinions! =)

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cevance's picture

Nice rhythm and good rhyme. A

Nice rhythm and good rhyme. A good read.

nightlight1220's picture

A great big snow wrapped

A great big snow wrapped gently around the soul

Love that line!!

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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."

"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "

 

DreamingNightmares's picture

I love this absolutely! I

I love this absolutely! I would lve to do a collaboration poem with you just to see how it would turn out!

TheNightmare13's picture

Collaboration Poem

I have never done a collaboration poem, but I am totally willing to try it out with you!