Built our love on a rocky sea
with rickety foundations
on the seas of our hope.
Upon our pontoon built with love and the fear,
of drwoning in blood, sweat and tears
the tides of disapproval always crashed violently
while they creaked and threatened to breaking
as so vehemently as they often did;
such violent waves of purging yet,
the foundations still stood;
Now I am not one for mystics and magic.
But, I am pretty sure tucked behind those eyes
in that steeled strength forged by the burden of proof
an invisible, powerful force
wrapped me around you
and held us tightly to those rickets
and forced them to hold;
and I think to my self
about how all those times
I wanted to jump off the edge,
or stray
why I couldn't.
Now the storm is leaving
and the clouds are clearing,
as dark clouds and thunder roll out of sight
I just know.
I am a believer.
I have seen
your once invisible light
a love no force of man or nature can pull away
from the approval lighting your heart
through the glint in your adoring eyes.
I am safe.
I am lit.
I see the endless blue skies
I am loved.
in you
I am alive.
our love survives.
How about 'The tide turns in
How about 'The tide turns in your eyes?' I love this its hitting close to home. Well written dear. hugss
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
SSmoothie I have updated this
SSmoothie I have updated this poem could I have your opinion please? I'm thinking now it would relate better with your suggested title. Not sure though... cheers Mav.
If its possible, no matter what it always starts with a dream!
I think it is great as is.
I think it is great as is. You need to do what you feel is right. not what others think. :) I merely suggested a title as asked. never did I actually think it would be a more fitting title. leave it just as you made it. thats what I do. hugss
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
OOOOhh SSmoothie! now you
OOOOhh SSmoothie! now you have got me confused! I really like that title... going to wait and think on it some more thanks so much!
If its possible, no matter what it always starts with a dream!
Oh do I love this ...like my
Oh do I love this ...like my own skin... I am going to think on it...
Thx for sharing.
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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
Thank you so much Nightlight
Thank you so much Nightlight 1220 much appreciated :)
its good to know you dont feel alone in certain situations. I am tickled pink with your response once again thank you!
If its possible, no matter what it always starts with a dream!
would anyone have any ideas
would anyone have any ideas on a better title suggestion please?
If its possible, no matter what it always starts with a dream!
Nope, that one's fine
The title fits the poem like skin ~allets~
Thank you Allets :) thats is
Thank you Allets :) thats is assuring to know.
If its possible, no matter what it always starts with a dream!