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Penn in play? Play Penn
They're off to Pennsylvania
To stump for their candidate
Joe Biden, Barack Obama
And the other guy I hate
Hope the voters go for Fetterman
I think he is the bettter man
While Dr Oz thinks he cannot be beat
If Oz loses, he'll say Dems cheat
He learned that from the Donald
The biggest fraud you'll ever meet
https://www.nytimes.com/2022/11/05/us/politics/obama-trump-biden-pennsylvania-midterms.html
This is good, and I agree,
This is good, and I agree, but I would suggest an adjustment to the eighth line. The pronoun, "he," doubles back to the nearest proper noun, which is Fetterman; with the implication (which stumbled me at first) that Fetterman would accuse the Democrats, his own party, of cheating. If Fetterman wins, and an accusation of cheating is raised, it will be Oz or Trump (who is really the Wizard of Oz, in this case, as the man behind the screen pulling the control levers) who will raise that accusation. Just replace "he'll" with "Oz'll" and the line will read more accurately and smoothy.
Otherwise, this is an excellent political poem.
Starward
I see you’re a perfectionist like me.
I see you're a perfectionist like me. You're absolutely right. The line has been changed. Thanks for pointing it out to me!
I see the correction, and I
I see the correction, and I say again: excellent poem!
Starward