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Love Lost I see but I have been blinded, I hear yet theres nothing but silence
I smile but only on the outside, tears streaming everywhere on the inside
Pain tingles through every inch of my nerves, heart-ache is definitely not what I deserve
Isolation . . . . fear of knowing, I ask myself how can I keep going
Why did you leave me in a world so cruel,
crushed my emotions, It was I who is the merciful fool
Anger twisted and mingles with hate, my life UN-predictable, it is my fate
I see, but I choose to be blind, I hear but nothing comes to mind
I smile yet only pain deep within lies, tears controls my mind yet crucifies
Tormenting voices, cursing in my head, I wonder if I am better of dead
by Abz aka (scandalous) 30.06.07
Quality write here... as an
Quality write here... as an amateur poet, your words painted a picture like art. You know how to make words more than what they would be on their own - the imagery is well put. For me, the structure of the poem is a little hard to read, it doesn't bring attention to any pattern, and I do see a pattern in it, as free verse poetry. Did I explain myself properly?
Cheers,
Adam_San
Yes completely understand, I
Yes completely understand, I felt there was something missing I probably be able to think more clearly tomoro, today I somehow felt clouded as a reminder today of my moms birthday even tho she passed - thank you Adam
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