In halls of day with chamber's fair,
Does sanity walk, and linger there.
Come threads of dark, to weave the moon,
Shadowed fiends will pipe their tune.
Black backed Demons claw your skin
Where forked of tongue, the viper's cling.
The shroud of night will call it's dead
To rain all fears upon your bed.
Yet shards of arrowed, morning light
That black backed Demon's heart shall smite.
The day fresh washed, your fears alayed,
Your Demon dragon has been slayed.
For me, sentence structure is
For me, sentence structure is always the key to good verses. Yours are always impressive. As always, I enjoyed the read.
You really should post more on facebook.
Hi Carl, Thank you so much,
Hi Carl, Thank you so much, I always value your views :-) I have posted several on Writers Guild, and facebook poetry site, but I get very little feed back or interest. Apart from a guy called josh who is an amazing poet most of the writing seems to be teenage angst Which is so different from mine, so I don't really bother with them anymore. Sue XX