Musing In A Shady Wood.

And in the shade and 

shadow such

slendour boughs

to rise and fall,

holding the grace

of ink black

tresses,

loosed

and shaken 

free

from silken 

ribbons.

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  The simplicity of what

 

The simplicity of what surrounds our lives every day is a pleasure to read, when painted with words by a true artist. 

Thank you for this, it's beautiful.  

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Thank you so much Wordman,

Thank you so much Wordman, it's amazing how the mind can show us something our eyes cannot see. sue.

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Excellent imagery. and also

Excellent imagery. and also the sibilance of the several words with "s" in them---that made me think of the sound of breezes moving through the trees.  I also thought of a passage from John Milton's Paradise Lost, in which he used sibilance to great effect (but, unlike your poem, the Miltonic passage was describing some diabolical aspects).


J-Called

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Thank you so much :-) I read

Thank you so much :-) I read this out loud to see if it sounded right when read, boy did I trip over those S's!

Thats the most diabolical thing about my poem. sue. :-) 

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Well, Uncle John had a

Well, Uncle John had a dufferent agenda.  But you give us verbal beauty in response to the beauty around you; he did not do that, really.


J-Called