The rain came in laughing,
splashing from leaf to
shimmering leaf, giggling
as gutters splutter to catch
their breath.
Each droplet chattering,
dancing on branches
dipping beneath the weight
of a thousand sparkling eyes,
blinking across a slowly
rising dawn.
wonderful wonderful May
wonderful wonderful
May miracles cause it from now on to come everywhere needed
in just the right amounts
Appologies for this late
Appologies for this late reply, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, thank you, sue.
The rain came in laughing,
The rain came in laughing, and I left smiling. Been a while since your last post, this was worth the wait. Thanks for cheering my day.
Thank you so much Wordman
Thank you so much Wordman your comment made my day, I'm very pleased you liked the poem and also touched to think you had noticed I haven't written for a while. Sue.
Your words made an ordinary
Your words made an ordinary weather event seem very special and very personalized. That is what real poetry does. Bravo!
Starward
Thank you so much, im very
Thank you so much, I’m very pleased you like it :-) xx
I was unwell yesterday, and
I was unwell yesterday, and obviously forgot to add this detail---I really like the way most of your verbs in the poem are put in the present tense form, so that the poem presents several actions similtaneously. In most lesser poets, the use of the "-ings" suffix is a tedious annoyance, but in your poem is produces the most delicate musicality; it reminds me of the celesta parts in a couple of Shostakovich's symphonies.
Starward
I hope you are feeling a lot
I hope you are feeling a lot better today :-)
Thank you for the lovely compliment on my writing, I can't say I have much English Literature education, we didn't study the great poets or writers at all at school sadly, even basic English was somewhat glossed over, so I tend to go with my instincts, and what my subject is telling me, I felt the rain was laughing, and I wanted to convey the gaiety with which it fell and the sheer exuberance it felt.
My dad was a great lover of reading poetry, and my mum just loved beautiful words, perhaps it rubbed off on me :-)
Blink-Eyed Raindrops
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Light and cheerful. Thanks, sweetwarer, ya made me smile! ~S~
Thank you I’m pleased it had
Thank you I’m pleased it had that effect :-) Sue