Venus.

Cobalt skies canvas a tracing of

black filigree branches.

Cupped beneath an arch of boughs

a crescent moon displayed.

A single star above them smiles;

fair Venus courts the eye.

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The more I read this poem,

The more I read this poem, the more I like it.


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word_man's picture

makes you want to visit the

makes you want to visit the blue hues in the universe


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And how!  I think it is very

And how!  I think it is very interesting that the blue shift is used to measure nearness, while the red shift indicates distance.  And not in the way that political commentators use those colors, but in a far more spiritual way; which, in my own opinion, is the way outer space should be approached.


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through the black holes,a

through the black holes,a portal like jacobs ladder


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Thank you Wordman, not sure I

Thank you Word_man, not sure I would want to I'm no good with heights! :-) sue.

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you would get used to it

you would get used to it


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I love astronomical poems,

I love astronomical poems, and this one has such classic hallmarks---so much packed into such a few lines.  Wow!


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Thank you very much, I wasn’t

Thank you very much, I wasn’t sure about the last line though. sue

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The last line is the best,

The last line is the best, although the apostrophe needs to be removed from the verb.  Still a poem of great significance, in such few lines . . . reminds me of Tanka and Haiku.  Thanks for the reply.


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Thank you, I’m glad you think

Thank you, I’m glad you think that line is ok :-)

apostrophies are the bane of my life I never can get them right.

sue x

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When I was in eighth grade,

When I was in eighth grade, our school went to half days because of budget issues.  In the free part of the day, my mother compelled me to study grammar drills, every week day, for that whole school year.  I hated it.  But my ACT/SAT scores were high enough in English to place me out of the required freshman writing course at college.  Whoo-hoo, thanks Mom.


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How marvellous but I can

How marvellous but I can imagine you weren’t impressed at the time.

 

 

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Very little that my mother

Very little that my mother ever did impressed me in a positive way; we were adversaries even from my early childhood.  But one thing she did that I have to honestly give her great credit for, is her insistence on knowing proper grammar, proper punctuation, and an extended vocabulary.  When I got up to college, to which I did not want to go at first, I found out that the joker in the deck was a dreaded two hour oral exam, during senior year, in one's major subject, which had to be passed successfully to obtain the degree.  And all of it, in my major, was volcabulary.  Any questions the examining committee (one of whom was hostile toward me) wanted to ask; grade was determined both on content of the answers and on the way the answers were presented in wording.  All oral, with no time to prepare in advance.  After the session, I went back to the dorm and passed out from the stress, lol. 


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You created a stunning and

You created a stunning and worthy frame for Venus. Branches as "filigree" was inspired. Love this. 

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Thank you very much :-) 

Thank you very much :-)