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love falling now
is it to late?
to catch this fate
up from this high
struggling to simply get by
wanting you
yet you have no clue
holding back the tears
with my flooding fears
tried to forget
but ever since we meet
the passion still lingers inside
even when im ready to break down and cry
maybe even die
walked with you through the begining
now that love is slowly thining
the aches of emptiness
but here i lay with nothing less
starving for your embrace
just wanting to see your face
the days get longer
im not getting any stronger
to fight back the past
hidding behind this mask
i dont think i can last
for this cast around my heart
was sure to break from the start
not wanting to be reminded
nor wanting to keep finding
your everlasting desire
that rekindled my fire
keep wishing on this star
but somehow i never get far
youve left me dangling
with the loniless strangling
suffocating all feeling
leaving me left bleeding
drenched in this pain
how will i ever keep sane?
the love so pure
its the only thing that can cure
this addiction
there is no resistence
wanting to feel like before
now here i am so damn sore
Beautiful poem young lady.
Beautiful poem young lady. You express so much emption through your words. Keep it up.
thanks so much :) ya thats
thanks so much :) ya thats mainly why i write to express how i feel.
forever and always <3 Jenn
i love this poem
I absolutely loooooooooove this poem <3 its deep and passionate and ur an amazing writer dont stop no matter wat people say u have a true talent
Love and hate go hand in hand for eternity
awwe thanks so much if u like
awwe thanks so much if u like this im sure ull like my other work :)
forever and always <3 Jenn
The Way I Would Like To Feel
Keep on writing, when the small words get repetitious and boring, expand to two and three syllable words - if you want description use an adj in front of a noun or an adjective to help out to be and to have...or other verbs that have more action...your work is about active things and people and thoughts yet the words are passive and laid back...I would love to feel a metaphor or simile, lady ~~~A
yes, i agree! this piece was
yes, i agree! this piece was actually written a while back when i had much to learn about writting, assuming you read my newer work you probably have seen the change and how i elaborate, and use adjectives and all senses of the body to create stronger poems, with more imagery and passion! but thank you!
forever and always <3 Jenn