An early day in the river
before dawn,
the sun just cresting
over the hill
A pair of ravens croak
in a high Oak,
calling down ancient ancestors
as waters swirl
The sun is peeping over
a craggy rock,
but the shadows are still long
over the stream
Evaporation fog floats like
a thin veil,
whispering to the sleepy
morning trout
I too, hear the whispers
of the past;
a lifetime of forgotten faces
lost to time
Their spirits have come down
to join me,
waste-deep in the swirly swirl
of mountain water
Cold waters coil round
a fallen elm;
something lurks below
a rolling swell
The first warm touch of sun
now high
in the ravens’ oak,
I remember my brothers’ smile
I have not departed, I am here
in your heart;
Here in the sunlit ripples, I hear
him say
I am here too, let me fly
with you,
beats my heart
in a bellowed, burned-out prayer
There is no hunger here,
I hear;
But it’s not your time,
the waters say
And there, just then
a wind
dipped into the vale
And a glorious rainbow
jumped
into the air
upon my hook
~/~
An excellent Poem! Superb!
An excellent Poem! Superb! And I say again, SUPERB!!! The imagery is precise and evocative and conveys the emotion well. From a lesser poet, or a wannabe, this could have been a melodramatic mess; but, in your words, it is precisely, succintly, and elegantly stated. This is a fine achievement.
I am bookmarking this on my PC. I want to be sure to revisit it again.
J-Called
Thanks again
Thank you once again for the kind words. I will put them in my pocket for a rainy day.
Thank you for the reply. The
Thank you for the reply. The poem is very impressive, and continues to be marked on my bookmark page as a favorite. Thanks again for posting it.
J-Called
the kind of things I try to understand
It has a lot of meaning to me too Starward. These are the kind of things I try to understand in life.