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Desperate
Desperate thoughts, running through my head
Desperate thoughts, written down in lead
Onto the paper, drops in my bed
Desperate thoughts, leak out of my head
Desperate thoughts, running through my head
Desperate thoughts, written down in lead
Onto the paper, drops in my bed
Desperate thoughts, leak out of my head
Had To Be Said
Desperate thoughts swim in my head
desperate notions turn to red
I wish I could be calm instead
written down, it had to be said.
Attention to rhytmn is less important than packed inside, every line advances the poem to an emotional plateau...almost achieved (drops in bed - tears? not clear and does not seem to fit) Just a thought ~ Lady A ~
While I appreciate your
While I appreciate your reading this; and I have nothing against constructive criticism, rhyme is never intentionally applied to my poetry. I do not write things just so that they rhyme, I write what I am trying to express and if they happen to rhyme so be it we all have our unique styles. And I am fully aware that there is a certain vagueness to this particular poem; it was intentional, it was an expression left to be interpreted by whomever reads it.
If you were interested in the original meaning behind that particular line it would be as simple as asking. I sometimes forget that there are people unfamiliar with my typical style/genre of poetry.
I am but an open book, it is up to you to turn the pages.