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ALL I ASK
I will bring you to a place with salty
breeze. We’ll walk in the sand
let our footsteps form memories
untarnished by the ebbing tides, the sea
our friend. Let me be the surf to wash
your shore. Let me become a whisper
amidst the silence, the vastness around us.
Let me be locked up inside the tiniest
chamber of your heart, away from the roaring
elements. Let me become a tear
and I would sit upon the corners
of your eyes. Let me be a promise spoken
by your lips, and should death separate us,
let me slip away first for I do not wish
to struggle for breath
without you.
Beautiful and heartfelt!
Good day
I have been reading your work, and I feel it fits into our themes!
I read hundreds of poems every month and as an amateur poet,
your style intrigued me to such an extent, that I would love to add
it to our small (± 154 poets) group of friends' website!
I would be honoured to have you aboard!
Please consider joining us!
All you have to do is to reply to this e-mail (dviljoen@tiscali.co.za) , and give your consent!
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Thank you
Deon Viljoen
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http://www.postpoems.com/members/deonviljoen/
http://www.geocities.com/poetryincolour/ (still under construction)
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I liked the prose style. Allows the rhythm to form by itself. Wonderful lines to say to a lover.
Debbie
DAMN!! That was deep as hell! I sincerely LOVED this poem!
Nicely done.
That wasn't short of brilliant i liked it very much Love Shells xxx
Serene,
This poem is a wonderful display of art. In fact, I am a publisher and would be interested in publishing it in three of my up-coming titles if you're interested in becoming a published author. Let me know and keep up the good work! Web URL: WWW.THEEAGLESGARDEN.COM
WHAT AN AMAZING COMBINATION of simple, 1-, 2-, & 3-syllable words ! ! You have a talent that is very mature, and a way of filtering your own, very obviously acute and poinant emotions, in a way that causes your readers to dredge back up their OWN emotions. You have carried ME back to the pleasant beaches I once inhabited with a lover, and through your eyes and words, I was again on that beach. I tasted the salt, I felt its spray, I saw those eyes again, recited from the sand but did not understand the words she wrote with a tawny, frail hand, heard the surf mimic her low laughter, and - - - - - well, I suppose I should write my OWN poem, heh ! ? ? You have wrestled the demon of apathy into submission, and you have written a masterpiece of pathos and sentiment. Thank you. Yours is one I shall print out and keep as inspiration, tucked into my Bartlett's. Thanks again.
I really liked this poem. It had a very powerful, yet subtle, use of imagry that really passed the message on to the reader without interference.
Keep up the amazing work!
A very beautiful portrayal of love.
Smile.. it is the cheapest facelift.
Hmmmm. Cool poem. I wish I can have the inspiration.
Have a nice and beautiful life!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
~My Best Wishes~
:)
Wow! This poem is amazing to me. It's simple yet intense. You have some REAL skill. I love this
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NICE!
Wonderful work indeed. Very enchanting and romantic. I like this a lot!
Sandie Angel :o)
My, my, my, I felt as though I were reading a private love letter from a mast wordsmith to his beloved when I read this. Very nicely put, and very good job of pulling your reader into the verse.
Jessica
All i can say to this one is "Breathless".
beautiful heart felt poem.
stephanie karpierz.
all i have to say is... wow.
So nice sounds like you really love this person your writing about in your head sincely trees
Wow, Gosh, shucks, Oops, Oh my how sweet it is to be loved by you.....LOL