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Lust Becomes Love
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One Plus One Is One Up the chakras
lust to love arose
.. transmuting itself
on the way to heart rose.
Up the chakras
lust to love arose
.. transmuting itself
on the way to heart rose.
Nice title and I like what you do with the poem. You are really good at writing very concise and tight poems where the imagery does the talking for itself. I like your style very much and have read several other poems under various categories. But in this one, I wish you'd did a little more in the poem itself and not relied on the authors comments to do the imagery's job for it. Do you know what I mean? I hope you don't think I'm rude. I appreciate constructive criticism when I do get it and I hope you will too. I wouldn't have bothered if I didn't really respect your work. Thanks for the poem.