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The days things went wrong was when my life feel.

When she left me just standing there with nothing to say.

She walked away without that twinkke i knew she had.

She didn't even look back and say goodbye.

As i sat there wondering why.

Another came up to me and i flw away.

Lost in her bueaty of her eyes.

Now that im here i'm going to try and stay.

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©2 February 2005 - 10:23pm — romeo122
5 April 2005 - 11:48pm — casey (not verified)
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that was confusing

26 March 2005 - 1:19am — Calvin Brooks (not verified)
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I found 4 typos, and 5 capitalization errors.

15 February 2005 - 7:17pm — Fawn Maddox (not verified)
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Hey this is a really good poem and i know how you feel. Check out my new one.

3 February 2005 - 1:51am — Daniel Brown (not verified)
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reeeaaallllyyy. That's interesting.

P.S. The last critique i wrote you wasn't directed towards you