I think its time for us to say "goodbye"
because I'm sick and tired
of trying to understand your lame alibis
and picking up the pieces of my broken heart,
after hearing your heart wrenching little white lies
I know you say that you can't live without me
and that I'm the air that you breath
but honey, why can't you see
you've asked me for a second chance,
to many more times than three.
I'm now saying my final goodbye
and that is all that's happening
I'm walking,with a broken heart, away from your sad alibis
and keeping my tears on lock down
whne I tell you I don't love you, my little white lie.
well robyn, this is the poem you had me read in english class today and i really liked it then and i just read it again and i like it even more. the rhythm is fantastic, and the way you placed the rhymes is brilliant. you portray a very strong emotion message thingy (hehe i'm tired so sorry for my weird word choices) and you do it well. woohooo!
my only critique is to fix the typo on the last line.
i read some of your other poems and they are fantastic as well. anywho, i'm out, ttyl. -meg