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mix of emotion
The past is faster than you think,
it catches up no mater how far you run.
dreams and hopes all depend on you,
to fulfill with style and..sencibility
The futures yours to hold and have,
To do with as you plan.
But do not dwindle on the wrong things
or you will be left behind.
as the clock slowly ticks on by,
every moment wasted you'll later ask why?
When the moments are fleeting,
and you're looking back on your life.
Remember all the fun things
and pay the bad ones no mind.
The futures yours to hold and have,
To do with as you plan.
to rule as you see fit,
far past the end of it.
one thing you should know,
Is that we’ll always be behind you.
No matter what you say or do,
We will back you up thru and thru.
I hope you know that we were always behind you.
I hope you know we'll back you now.
And I pray that you'll never feel alone.
Cause we'll be there to support you.
Well it is well done cause I like the idea that you are trying to put across and that's good but vic's right, that last line in the second stanza needs work.
Your pretty good.
nikki
Nicole.J.Burgesss
hey
where have i seen this before?
lol its not that bad
its not like you haven't just stared here right?
thought so luv
besides you have not seen the poetry i wrote for a start
lucky me this time :)
ash
Much Love
Ashley
Okay, the idea behind the poem is great...but touch up are required. lemme see if thinkin cap is workin now or not lol
okay i like the first stanza and especially the '...' cuz it adds emphises.
the second one however needs a diff ending, possibly about getting lost in the past instead of being left behind or missing out on the great future...
third stanza and second line you need to switch 'you'll' around with 'later' add 'you're' to the fourth line, and i like the last line
i liek the fourth stanze
and i really really like the fifth one :))
the 2nd line has spellin errors gallore!! but good idea..third line could be ' i pray that you never feel you are a lone'
enough help or possibilities? tough, all i can give...take or no tis oaky
love ya always
Vicki